A Picture...
When I was
in school my course was very disorganized and divided so we never collected
enough money to make a great study trip, so we finally traveled a weekend to
the nearest beach.
The photo I
chose was taken on the beach "El
Canelo" in 2014 when I was in third year of high school and we were on that
trip. It was taken with timer and shows my group of friends from school.
The tour of
studies did not have much of "tour" nor of "studios" was
more like a walk to the beach between friends. We traveled on November 14 and
returned on the 16th because the next day we had classes in the first hour and
it was not convenient to enter classes with the smell of alcohol still in our
bodies, although anyway the whole school noticed our hangover the day Monday.

Ohhhh is a beautiful photograph. Sometimes I would like to go back to school so I can see all my friends in Coquimbo again: '(
ResponderEliminarIt's great to travel with friends for a few days. Especially in large groups. Those days should be nice memories.
ResponderEliminarGreat, change the little details mentioned: 14th, study trip. of a tour, etc.
ResponderEliminarWell done, there are very few lexical and grammar mistakes. I would suggest you consider paragraphing.
ResponderEliminarCorrections:
"tour" nor of "studios" was more like= "tour" nor of "studios", it more like
between friends.= with friends
November 14= November 14th
the day Monday= on Monday
T:3, L:2,5, G:2,5 = 8 pts
GRADE: 6.5